▶ Your Answer :
Some
people say that it is more important to give students prizes and awards for
student’s effort than achievement. Personally, I agree with the statement for
two reasons. First, students can build self -confidence. Second, student will
cheat if they only judged by the efforts.
To
begin with, students will build their self -confidence. Some people may say that
it is more important to give student prizes and awards for student’s
achievement. However, student’s self-confidence will be gained when the prizes are given for their efforts.
Let me take a middle school for example. The school is known for it’s easy going
and friendly teachers. School offers diverse after-school activities. These
activities encourage students to develop their talents and learn how to
cooperate with others. Also, through these they relive stress. Teachers often
praise students for their efforts and find their strong points. Students who
gained confidence stay focused in their class and study on their own with out
study stress. To conclude, I agree that
prizes and awards should be given to students for their efforts not the
achievement. This is because students will gain self-confidence.
Lastly, judging only by student’s achievement
will make them cheat. Many students cheated on the national college entrance
exam. They send test answers to their friends on cell phones. They can attend
top university if they got high score. So they do not think about efforts or process.
They are mainly focused on the achievement. For conclusion, students should be
awarded for their efforts. This is because they will cheat for good
achievement.
For conclusion, it is more important to
give students prizes and awards for student’s effort than achievement for two
reasons. First, students will build self-confidence. Second, judging only by
student’s achievement will make them cheat.
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