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Topic은 "Do you agree or disagree? It is better to take the most difficult and challenging classes in college or at university even if it means that you probably will not get top grades in them." 입니다.
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1. [ㅋ]님이 이렇게 말씀하셧습니다.
as people go to college를 학생들이 콜리지나 유니벌시티에 있을때로 고쳤음 좋겠음 그리고 두번째 문단에서 can fit into their classes over time 이거에 대한 설명이 있어야지 바로 example 넘어가면 안좋음. 그러니까 logic flow를 언급하는게 좋음 내생각임 어쨋든
[ㅋ]님 감사합니다!!
제가 그래서 다시 에세이를 썻습니다.
When people go to college, most of them are prone to have difficulties choosing classes. Some freshmen, in my opinion, would think that all classes might be interesting, not knowing which classes to choose. Others might have problem picking between two choices, since they have limited time. If they, however, are choosing between the most difficult classes and easy classes, I would definitely say that they should go for the most challenging classes.
First of all, students, I think, can fit into their classes over time. Basically, a student can befriend smart students, who can teach him or her, making him or her easier to follow the class. For example, I have a cousin who is now a senior in a university. She was very interested in history, so she took the most difficult and challenging class. Although, many of her relatives try to stop her, her will was bold. At first, she had a hard time in her class. She sometimes wanted to give up. However, as the time past, she became the best student in her class, receiving A’s in every exam.
Furthermore, going to the most difficult classes might benefit one when he or she is applying for a job. People who interview applicants are easily impressed by unique specialties or records. If a person had attended to the most challenging class in a university, the interviewers would get surprised by his or her records. That person, even in financial stagnation like these days, would become the winner and get jobs easily, maybe even get scouted to do a job.
Moreover, personally, I think taking risks is needed in a person’s life. Without dangers and risks, a person could not have fun in his or her life. In addition, they can improve one and increase one’s skills. For instance, I have a dream of attending chemistry and physics classes. By attending to the most challenging and difficult classes of chemistry and physics, I would have fun, since I have interests in them, and improve my knowledge of science.
In conclusion, I agree that it is worth attending the most difficult and challenging classes in a university and college. A student can easily fit into those classes, gain benefits, and enjoy the risk by attending those classes. Making choices can change a person’s life, sometimes even harshly. Since attending to these classes can lead us to advance of ourselves, choosing to attend these classes and changing your life might not be a bad idea.
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