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Some people might say that individuals can barely influence the environmental issues of a country since those problems are too complex for a person to handle. However, there are several things individuals can do to protect today’s worsening environment, and individuals can do much about these issues. One can use public transport or bicycles instead of their cars, and a family can reduce the amount of electricity used as much as they can.
To begin with, one can use public transports or bicycles, especially when they are moving short distance. Car exhausts are one of the main reasons for the air pollution. Therefore, if people use public transportations, it would reduce the amount of car exhausts. For example, Seoul City in Korea has started a system in which car owners can’t use their cars on a specific day of a week. For instance, if someone decides to participate and says he wouldn’t drive on Tuesdays, he would get a sticker that says ‘Tuesday’ to attach on the car front window. Even though this is voluntary, most people are participating, and this has made a difference in the amount of car exhausts in Seoul. Like this, using public transportations or bicycles is good for the environment and the people who are doing that. (제 생각엔 내용상 써 줄 필요 없어서 지웠습니다. )It’s killing two birds with a stone. Thus, individuals would be very willing to do so, and it would influence the environment.
Moreover, each family can cut the amount of the electricity they use at their house. They can turn off the lights or any other electric products that are not in use at the moment. It would also reduce the amount of carbon dioxide emitted at the power plants. If CO2 is less emitted, it would impede the progress of global warming. According to a research(여기서 지어내어서라도, 이 조사가 어디에서 이뤄진 건지 명시해 주심 더 설득력 있을 것같아요), if a person watches TV for an hour less, it would much slow down the growth of global warming.
To conclude, individuals can affect the environmental issues of a nation by using public transportation and less consuming electricity. Also, as an old proverb goes, many drops would make a shower. And if all the people in a nation contribute to solve environmental issues, it wouldn’t be different from national efforts, so it could be true that individuals can affect the whole nation’s environmental problems.