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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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we are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in businesses, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used for in future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits. | |
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like the movie A.I. suggests, highly intelligent computers can pose a threat to human society. Nevertheless, in this era where computers are solely used for advancing diverse aspects of people's lives, it is no doubt that they are rather enhancing the overall quality of our lives. In my opinion, assuming that no computer systems are abused, we can get a deluge of information through the internet and be benefited in many different ways. The paragraph below will give you details about why and how I feel this way.
First of all, regardless of the stakes computer proposes, it can be used to elevate the overall quality of human lives. For example, undeveloped people during the primitive age were ignorant of how to use tools and thereby spent great deal of time making their home nests and protecting foods. Only if they were aware of how to use the tools, then they would have been able to take the advantage of them. Likewise, as we are in a world of computers and know how to use them properly, there need to be no worry about using the computer at all. computers are created by humans to help other humans and thereby can not be used as a bad tool. Of course, the possibility of some people intentionally manipulating program files to attack governmental system or private web pages for personal profits is excluded. 이유가 있다면 더좋겠네요->is excluded since ~
Secondly, we can get a flood of information via the internet. The purpose of the internet is to share information with others. so we share movies, recorded sports games and others through the internet. The main reason the internet gives us the eternal benefit is that the name of the users are mostly anonymous and for that we become in touch with unimaginable amount of information that were unavailable before. In this current age of the internet, where the information that one has accumulated works as a criterion for judging other people, it is crucial to be intellectual and knowledgable. However, without the computers, no the internet will cease to exist. Therefore, computers are, as a tool for acquiring knowledge, vital and posing a great potential.
Basic development of this paragraph is fine, but the idea that talks about the anonymity passes too quickly and so the clarity is somewhat obscured. Although the whole body is well written enough to cover the unexplained part.
To conclude, as using the internet has become a main part of our daily lives, it became nearly impossible to be fully ignorant of any kinds of information. We get tons of beneficial or whatever information through the internet and computers are expected to provide us more convenient tools to improve several aspects of our lives. Generally speaking, computers are really everywhere and essential for a modern life.
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