Have you ever done online shopping? As you know, nowadays many people shop. There are two sort-> sorts of shopping. One Thing is-> One is online shopping and the other is shopping in a traditional store. All of them is very useful to people.-> Although both of them are used widely, personally I prefer to use online shopping than shopping in a traditional shopping. The convenience, price, and information about product in two things-> two of them, both, them, each of them, both of them, (all correct) 'but NOT two things' are quite different.
About 10 years ago, shopping in a traditional store was very useful. As time goes by the trend about shopping is changed.-> As time went by, the shopping trend changed. That means many online shopping is being made.-> Online shops were starting to get popular. Now there are many businessmen. They are so busy. So, they can’t afford to spend a lot of time in shopping. That’s why they use online shopping.-> People these days are highly engaged with work and lives a hectic lifestyle with very little time. Online shopping satisfies the requirements of these lifestyle. Online shopping access is very simple. If you want to use online shopping, you just prepare computer and internet connection. So, you can use it whenever and wherever. However, in a traditional store, you have to go there. So, you will lose your time and effort.-> However, shoppers to actually visit the traditional stores which requires extra time and effort.
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Second thing between online and traditional store in shopping is price. Above all, online shopping owners don’t need to build store. That means they can save money so they can sell low price at product. It is very wonderful. So, many students who don’t have much money use online shopping. I also don’t have much money. So, I usually use online shopping. On the other hand, traditional shopping is used by some people. They want to confirm that the product they’ll buy is real because online shopping often occur scam or fraud.
The last thing is information. You can know a lot of information about product you want. Actually I experienced that. I saw a lot of information in online shopping. That was about 2 pages in A4 size. But, in a traditional store, you can’t know much information. That is only related to knowledge of the clerk.
Actually we can’t decide that what things are better. It depends on people. But, I think online shopping will be increasing gradually. And for me, online shopping is much better than a traditional store.. |