■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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▶ Topic :A person's looks and dress is more important for success than having good ideas is. | |
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▶ Your Answer :
Humans have instinct to desire the success. It is dependent on individual how they achieve the success. Considering people's perception of success, it begins with employment. People strive themselves to be chosen by reputed institution, such as big enterprise. Then, what makes a true success in the long-run? People would make themselves look outstanding to give good impression to interviewers in order to get recruited. It is unpredictable, however, to acknowledge that it is an answer for the success. The key is a good ideas.
In 21st century, having good ideas is directly meant to have strong weapons. The world is now considered as information society. Information can be interpreted as good and creative ideas. Big enterprises are now on the war of information. Apple company, one of the biggest enterprises, is admitted by everyone for its innovative products originated from good and creative ideas. Other companies which are being underestimated for their 'idealess' business now try to recruit people who are 'ideaful'. To sum it up, all the companies are wanting people whose brain is full of good ideas. It may be true that giving good impression in interview by good looking and dresses results in getting employed, but it doesn't ensure the individuals' success.
On top of that, good ideas occur make the world to be beneficial. Suppose one's ideas can affect the products or the decisions of the company, his or her good ideas may produce good products or good decision that can possibly benefit the world. For example, when Edison invented a bulb, it lighted the darkness of the world. Then, nobody can casts doubts that the person can achieve the success. Perhaps, all the people working in venture business chose to walk this way so as to success in this way of achieving.
Accordingly, good looking is one of the important factors in employment,but it is not everything. The world requires freshness, and the freshness comes from creativeness. People should be prepare for the requirement to use in the trade, which exchanges good ideas with the success.
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