09/12 한국 : People are not allowed to use the cell(mobile) phone in the public transportation |
With the advent of the high-tech telecommunication, many people are using a cell phone in these days. The cell phone has small appearance in size and it is very helpful to communicated (communicate) with other people who are in remote area. However, many people now feel some (delete) tiresome to(because of) the noise of a cell phone. Especially, when people use public transportation, the cell phone mainly causes the noise. For these reasons, the cell phone banned (using a cell phone is banned) to communication to other people (unnecessary - delete) in the public area. About (Having) this policy, some people say that the policy is not necessary but inconvenient. While (This is not a adverb connecter --> However or Nonetheless), I think that the policy is very helpful and needed to maintain a calm atmosphere in public area. That is because the cell phone's noise (the noise from a cell phone) makes many people nervous and (?) First of all, the cell phone now becomes the cause of noise in many areas. Many people suffered from a form of noise from many areas. This noise has a negative effect on people's emotion. Especially, when more than two people are speaking with other people on the phone in public area, the surrounding people are influenced from the cell phone' noise. According to a research conducted at On top of that, the major drawback of using mobile phone in public transportation is impulse noise. The impulse noise means that it is able to cause broking electronic machines. The mobile phone is one of the most garget that emits harmful electromagnetic wave to all over the place. Especially, in the airplane, the cell phone causes the unexpected terrible accident like an airplane expose. For more objective example, I read a newspaper article a few weeks ago, the article (delete --> where it was) said that three major airplanes including 500 passengers have been exposed in mid(?) air from the 2002s to the present (I am not sure what you are trying to say..). In this sense, I strongly argue that using cell phone in the public transportation should be prohibited by strict law. On the other hand, some people also say that the mobile phone is a pretty handy and effective. For instance, the effective garget is able to inform beneficial information and news for us to avoid the terrible traffic jam and the severe weather change. I also well know this advantageous of the mobile phone but the disadvantage far overweight advantage. The reason is way, already the driver of pilot of the public transportation well knows about that kind of information and there are other methods like the internet and the newspaper and so on. From this aspect, I believe that prohibiting using cell phone in the public transportation is right.transportation. Moreover, this policy will play a beneficial role in the public from the far-sighted viewpoint. |
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