Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more valuable to receive advice from older friends than from those in the same age.
Some people things think that the same age friends are more valuable to receive advice than older friends. However, in my opinion, the older friends are more important for two reasons. First, older friends have a lot of useful information. Second, they have a great deal of experience in handing problems.
Above all, older friends have wider and more valuable information.
이 에세이의 중점은 동갑내기와 나이많은 친구를 비교 하는것입니다.
have lot of useful information, have a great deal of experience, have wide and valuable information처럼 일반화해서 정의하는 것이 포인트가 아닙니다.
Heavy workload or difficult homework often exhausts students. Sometimes they feel disappointed at poor grades. In this case, by building a good relationship, older friends can help them to overcome such difficulties. Take my experience as an example. When I was high school student, my homeroom teacher gave homework what was so unfamiliar and difficult. The older friends gave helpful ideas, materials and warm words. I was deeply moved by his warm words and took courage from his advice and materials. If I have not older friends, it is impossible. It seems this example is not just limited to older friends since it is also possible with same age friends. So this might not be a sufficient example.
As a result, I could successfully finish my homework and my grades greatly improved. As my experience illustrates, the older fiends were more valuable than same age friends.
들여쓰기, 문단나누기 등의 깔금한 정리도 필요합니다.
Besides, they have amount of experience in handing have more experience in dealing with problems than same age students. Teenage years are a difficult period for a large number of people. Many of them often feel insecure about their future. They are confused among many different aspects. The older friends gave are able to give good advice. Because they were already suffered from lots of difficult situation and throughout this situation they relieve to? various great answers.
In this regard, it is certain that a good relationship with older friends contributes to their successful adjustment to the life.
In conclusion, older friends have more variable than same age friends.
Older friends not only have wide knowledge and information, but also, a great deal of experience in handing life.
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