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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Topic : Being creative, rather than planning carefully, results the best solution to a problem. | |
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Since people are living hard life in this world, they usually face with problem unexpectedly. Also, they are trying to find the best way to solve the problem. In this issue, some people argue that being creative, rather than planning carefully, results the best solution to a problem, (rephrase!) because they believe difficult problem needs unusual solution that people can not predict. However, from my point of view, I disagree with the statement for those the following reasons.
To begin with, people can solve problem for the best way with well-planning due to the fact that to handle problem needs a lot of information and knowledge. Moreover, there is an old saying that 'You can will win when you know the enemies. ' For example, when I was trying to prepare for TOEFL (Test of English as a Foreign Language), my score was bad bed. The reason was that I didn't have much information and know much how how to solve the problem about TOEFL though I was really good at speaking English. The test needed many skills for solving English matter the specific style of problems. So I researched and planned TOEFL to get good score.
On top of that, being creative performs individually that won't get help from other people. (incorrect sentence) Since being creative is very unusual and personal ( this cannot generally be accepted without more elaboration. why is being creative so individual?), other can't understand how one solve a problem. Conversely, a person who plans carefully will call others' help if it is the best way of solving problem. Also, they can help him or her because the person is finding best, but common way that almost people can predict. For instance, in my university, I believe that I could solve the homework imaginatively. However, I couldn't because I felt my limited thought without others' help.
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In conclusion, I strongly believe that people should plan specifically when they solve a problem rather than being creative. The reasons are that it needs a lot of information and people can deal with their problem well when they get helps from others.
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