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Many countries spend lots of money on space and some people think it is only a waste of money. They think that the money should be spent on realistic things such as creating jobs, building things that help us to live conveniently. However, I believe that we should spend more money on exploring outer space because our lives will be more convenient, and it is an investment for our future.
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To begin with, exploring the outer space provides lots of convenience. Nowadays, we use our cell phones, watch televisions, search information on the Internet and these things are all related to space. Satellites are used to transmit data throughout the world. Without the development of space, we might not get information even from a far places so quickly. For example, there was a terror in Norway which had 93 victims. After this big event happened, it only took few minutes to get information about it from the Internet even Norway is far away from Korea. Without space exploration, we cannot send useful information each other with through computer. Like this, study about space helps us to live in comfortable life which we can exchange news each other immediately.
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On top of that, exploration of outer space is an investment for our future. In the future, there might be a problem in Earth or our solar system. We cannot live in a place that is too dangerous and unsuitable to for human being. So,Therefore(So를 문장 시작할때 쓰는건 좋지 않아요), at that time we should live to in other planets that have similar conditions to those of Earth. Scientists are trying to find a planet which has enough oxygen, water, and other things to live in. We don’t know when the Earth will be destroyed, so we have to prepare for it now. For example, I heard that the sun will explode after 5 billion years. And Also(And를 문장 시작할때 쓰는건 좋지 않아요) as the sun explodes, people cannot survive on Earth anymore. So,Therefore we can move to another planet, and leave the solar system if we study about outer space steadily.
To sum up, I think we should spend more money on the exploration of space. It is because it gives lots of convenience in our lives, and we can prevent emergencies that might happen on Earth in the future. People use things that are related to space on daily lives, and some of them cannot realize the importance of it. Exploring space is not the waste of wasting money, but it is one of the most important things we should continue.
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