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Many people believe that adult entertain life more than young people. Older people have more money than young people. So Therefore(So를 문장 시작할 때 쓰면 좋지 않아요) they think older people have a great chance to enjoy life. However, I strongly believe that young people enjoy their life more than older people because they are more physically active and they have fewer responsibilites.
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To begin with, young people have more opportunities to enjoy their lives because they are more energetic. This is mainly because they are physically strenth strong and more active. For example, When I hiked up the mountain with my grandfather, I always reach the top of the mountain but my grandfather gave up get to to get there. Because Since(Because를 문장 시작할 때 쓰는건 좋지 않아요) he was exhausted when he reach at the middle of the mountain. He always misses the energetic days when he was young.
Also, young people are happier because they have fewer things that they have to care for. As people age, they also have with responsibilities such as taking care of their children and do their jobs to maintain their family lives. These cares restrict the actions they can do and thus limit how much they can enjoy life, whereas young people with no obligations are free to pursue. For example, my eldest brother who is married with two kids has never taken a whole week off since he began his own business. He cannot enjoy his free time as much as he did when he was young. On the other hand, I can take a field trip whenever I want, because I am still a single. He envied me when I took a trip to Italy for two months last summer vacation.
In short, I firmly believe that young people have not only have physically strenth strong body but fewer responsibilities. On the whole, most young people want in a rush to be older, not realizing the advantages that of their youth. However, they need to cherish their youth while when they can, since this is the only time that the young will have this invaluable opportunity for happiness.
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