■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Topic :Today's people spend too much time on personal enjoyment - doing things they like to do rather than they should do. do you agree or disagree? | |
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Some people say that today’s people spend too much time on personal enjoyment rather than on what they should do. I disagree with this statement for two reasons. One reason is today’s people have so many things to do than any other generations’ people. The other reason is people who live in modern society have to do their many duties.
First of all, today’s people have to do so many things. For example, college students have no time to enjoy themselves because of highly competitive job market. As opposed to the past when focusing on a single major is enough, today’s college students are required to do more and more. The first priority is given to developing a high level of English proficiency. Taking a language courses in an English-speaking country is a must. Students flock to English test prep courses in and out of college. Next it is a basic requirement to get a decent GPA. Naturally it is commonplace to stay up all night to do well on mid-term and final exam. Furthermore students have to take a time out of their busy schedules to get a couple of certificates. There is no break even on vacation. This definitely shows that they don’t spend their time for their personal enjoyment.
In addition, people today have more duties than their fathers. Nowadays a growing number of people do both of doing housework and making living. Many fathers do the laundry and wash dishes after work. Meanwhile most mothers work for making living. This means that it is hard for them to get time for themselves such as watching sports, having a drink and talking with friends. This fact obviously explains why today’s people don’t spend too much time on personal enjoyment.
To sum up, I disagree that today’s people spend too much time for themselves instead of what they should do. This is because of two reasons which I mentioned above. First, they have many things which they have to do. Second, today’s people also have many duties. | |
처음이라 무진장 힘드네요 ㅡㅜ 모쪼록 뼈와살이 되는 첨삭부탁드립니다.
아 그리고 이렇게 쓴다면 몇점이나 나올까요???