Outline
Agree
1. 스포츠는 학생들의 신체 건강을 향상시킨다
-많은 연구 결과들이 운동이 뼈, 근육 등을 강화한다는 사실을 보여준다.
-예) 비만인 사촌이 정기적으로 걷기 시작한 이후 체중을 감량하였다.
2. 스포츠 활동은 학생들의 사회적 기술을 양성한다.
-스포츠 활동은 공동의 노력과 협력을 필요로 한다.
-예) 축구 경기
도입
In order to prepare their students academically and help their graduates find jobs, many universities fund their libraries and other academic facilities at the expense of sports activities. In the "real world," sports are considered a waste of time at worst and a pleasant diversion at best.
대주제문
However, sports improve students' physical health and social skills. Therefore, Universities should invest an equal amount of money in both their students' sports activities and school libraries.
소주제문1
To start with, sports activities play a pivotal role in promoting students' physical health.
구체적근거1:일반적진술
This is evidenced by a number of clinical studies that clearly show that a variety of physically active aerobic exercise such as cycling, swimming, and running, especially during one's twenties, build and strengthen bones, muscles, and joints. More importantly, habitual physical activity has a positive influence on circulation of blood and reduces the risk of hypertension and diabetes.
구체적근거2:예시
To illustrate this point, my cousin led a sedentary life by being glued to the computer for hours on end everyday. Inevitably, he suffered from obesity as a result of his inactive lifestyle. However, he began go lose considerable weight after he joined a walkathon club in college and started walking for two hours everyday for five months as his doctor suggested.
마무리문장
Likewise, students can reap numerous health benefits from participating in sports activities.
소주제문2
Also, sports activities foster students' social skills
구체적근거1:일반적진술
This is because sports include a wide variety of group qctivities such as soccer, football, and basketball that require collective effort and cooperation.
구체적근거2:예시
The best example of this is a soccer game. When participating in soccer games, students have the chance to learn how to cooperate and work as a team. they cheer for their teammates, pass the ball to one another through openings, and strive together for the common goal of leading the game to victory, one that a single person cannot attain.
요약/정리
To summarize, I definitely believe that universities should give the same amount of funds to students' sports activities as they do to their libraries.
맺음말
On the whole, I agree with the saying "a sound mind in a a sound body." in other words, students' mental fitness from healthy social relationships and physical well-being are the most important factors for their success.
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