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어휘나 문법실력보다는 구성이나 일관성 유기적인 구성(organization 과 unity coherence) 부분에서 얼마나 가능할까요?
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Which do you prefer between solving a problem alone and asking advice from others to solve it ?
As time goes by, our society becomes complicated and complex much better. Some people may argue that it is
better to solve a problem alone than to ask others from advice to solve it. However, I have a different idea. When it
comes to the statement that solving a problem alone is a better choice than asking advice others for advice to solve
it, i strongly disagree with it for the following reasons.
First of all, an individual's problems is too complicated to solve oneself. South Korea is one of the countries that
experienced rapid development which drastically changed the country from agrarian society to industrialized one.
Furthermore, as the world is continously glabalizing with no distinct boundaries that hinder active global
interactions, interrelationship between individuals has been increasing. Taking this background into account, it is
more justifiable to contend that one single problem is not a independent trouble but closely related to other factors.
Thus, it is natural that people should consider other people' experience, knowledge and opinion to find a solution
to the problem. Gallup Korea conducted a related survey to this argument. They asked a group of employed Korean
in their forties whether they ask for help when they encounter serious problem and if so, why. According to the
result, a vast majority of respondants answered 'yes' and most of the reason is that this was helpful to overcome a
difficulty until now.
In addition, diversity of perspective toward the situation is necessary to succeed in life. Since South Korea had
gone through the economic crisis, the unemployment rate has been continuously increasing and many job-hunters
are suffering from having no jobs to support thier livelihood. Owing to the competitive atmosphere, possessing
superior multiplicity of perspective is tremendously required for them to overcome this difficulty. This is beneficial for
them because various advices from many different people broaden thier outlooks and many companies prefer
applicants having this ability. There is a convincing example supporting this idea. A recent survey conducted by the
federal government shows that over 75 percent of participants in this research said that they could resolve thier
problem thanks to their diversified viewpoints that they could gain from thier coworkers, friends, family.
In conclusion, I prefer asking advice others to solve a problem because of the above reasons; our highly
labyrinthine circumstance and importance of diverse perspectives.