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In this 21st century society, most of prestigious companies do projects as a group not individually. People need to work as a group a lot. People usually have doubt the advantages of group working. However, some reasons must be there, why society encourages most of companies to work as group. The reason is that they can make better result. Study is same as work. When students study as a group, then they can show better result. Therefore, group working is better than alone, because it makes students to supplement their drawbacks, and they can get inspired by competing each other.
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To begin with, studying with a group is better, since it supplements each student’s deficits. People have flaws themselves, after they fix their problems, then they can be more developed. It is hard to be aware their problems by themselves, but they can be noticed by other people. Also, they can teach them to find the right solutions. For example, in most of high schools’ math classes, teachers offer study time at least one time in 4 classes. The purpose they do that is students can use that time as chance to find their problem what that they misunderstood. Also, through that time they find the right way or easier way to solve those questions. Not only in math classes, but also in English Language Art classes, teachers give students work period when they write short story. They also ask them to share their ideas with their friends. This process is very effective, because their friends can hear their stories objectively, so they can tell them how to develop their story better. Hence, studying as group is even proven by school teachers as a good way to of study due to developing their abilities more.
In addition, studying as a group evokes students to study harder, so studying within group is good for students. The most critical element to make students to study is motivating them to study. Group members affect each other, so they are inspired. They see how much the other students study harder than them, so they are stimulated as well. For instance, according to the research, students were grouped with 4 four(10이하의 단위는 영어로 써주세요) people before biology final exam. They were very close friends, so no one expected them to compete competeing each other. However, the result was surprising. One students made the cue card for each chapter, then the next day the other students made the cue cards even with highlighter. The other three kids’ grades were low, and they do did not study typically. The next day, they asked each other one another and do did some quizzes. The result was successful, all 4 four students got higher than their average grades. According to this experiment, students are were pressured to study in good condition since they are with they are with friends. Also, they can do competition each other, one another, this makes them to study harder. Thus, apparently studying in group is effective way to students.
To conclude, students need to be involved in the group when they are studying, because their shortages are easily found and also easily but effectively solved by their group members. Also, they are encouraged to study harder because of atmosphere of the group. When group study hard, then students also feel they need to study. Therefore, the group working leads students in good consequences, and obviously it is good way to improve themselves more.
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