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Opinions might be divided over whether
children should be competitive in playing sports to achieve the prize or not. People
from different walks of life may take different stance on this contentious
issue. Personally, I believe that children can more benefits by playing their sports
for fun and there are two reasons that could validate my position.
First, by playing sports games with other friends
for fun, children can improve their social skills and their relationship with
other people. During playing sports game, they can share the feeling of funny
and when game is finished, they can talk about the experience of their play.
This can make them more to be friendship, and their relationship is highly improved.
For example, when I was in the middle school, I was very shy boy and didn’t have any friends. However, there was a friend, kisuk, who liked
the sports game. He often invited me to play games, and we could enjoy the
game. After then, I could be more socialized throughout playing games.
In addition, playing games for fun can relieve
the stress that children might have in their school life. In these days, many children
are stressed out because they have a lot of homework and pressure to do well at
studying from their parents and teachers. Therefore, If children play sports in
competitive environment, they can be more stressed out, resulting in decreases
of their academic skills. Therefore, by playing sports game without any
pressure to get prize, they can be free from the competitive school life. For example,
when I was in middle school, after exams were finished, I often went to sports
center, and playing basketball games with my friends. Therefore, I could forget
about my worries and relieved all my stress that was accumulated by exam.
All in all, because of two reasons I mentioned above,
I firmly believe that children should not be competitive, but enjoy for fun in
playing sports games
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