For quite as long as I can remember, some For quite a long time, people have debated whether the ability to cooperate with other well is more important today than in the past. 사람들이 debate했다가 본인의 의견없이 이유가 나와요;ㅅ; TOPIC sentence:___________________________________________.The rationale behind this is that the works in today are being more complicated more than it was in the past. Moreover, ability to cooperate with others is one of the main factors of success in today.
*For quite as long as I can remember로 절대시작하지마세요 T T 외운템플릿같아서 그런것도 있지만 문맥상도 맞는 경우가 거의 없어요..
**In today =>> today , these days로 바꿔주세요 ! 밑에서 부턴 안 고쳤어요 ~
First of all, the works in today are being more complicated more than in the past. Because of the ongoing urbanization and civilization, living the modern in today'society is become complicated and is mixed with all aspects. So, it is hard for one person to solve the problem on their own. This is because solving the problem in today requires is needed to diverse experience and knowledge from cooperation obtained with ideas of many different peopleother thinking. According to a study released by Korean Research Center, more than two-thirds of CEOs mentioned that they have recommended groupgruop-working system to solve the important problem in their company. This is because most of the tasks these days in today are so complicated that one person cannot don't do it. This study showed that most of the tasks in today consist of the mixed tasks in many aspects. So, it is clear that ability to cooperate with other is more important today than in the past.
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Additionally, ability to cooperate with others is one of the main factors of success in today. These days, achieving something by yourself is impossible because everything is related to others. In particular, sense of cooperation is necessary for people to achieve their object. Take my experience as an example. When I was a middle school student, I have had a fear of English(필히대문자로:). =>>I was terrified in front of English-speakers. / I feared English. However, I overcame this the hardship after being introduced to a introducing native speaker who is a my friend's father. He always taught teach me english and communicated with me whenever I wanted to learn English. This experience helped me to overcome the English problem. =>>예전에 일어난 일들이니깐 몽땅 과거형으로 써주세요 ^^ As my experience illustrates, cooperation is the important factor to live in today.
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