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Opinions might be divided over whether children should be competitive in playing sports to achieve the prize or not. People from different walks of life may take different stance on this contentious issue. Personally, I believe that children can more benefit by playing their sports for fun and there are two reasons that could validate my position.
First, by playing sports games with other friends for fun, children can improve their social skills and their relationship with other people. During playing sports game, they can share the feeling of funny and when game is finished, they can talk about the experience of their play. This can make them more to be to have more friendship, and their relationship is highly improved. For example, when I was in the middle school, I was very shy boy and didn’t have any friends. However, there was a friend, kisuk, who liked the sports game. He often invited me to play games, and we could enjoy the game together. After then, I could be more socialized through playing games.
In addition, playing games for fun can relieve the stress that children might have in their school life. In these days, many children are stressed out because they have a lot of homework and pressure to do well at studying from their parents and teachers. Therefore, If children play sports in competitive environment, they can be more stressed out, resulting in decreases of their academic skills. Therefore, by playing sports game without any pressure to get prize, they can be free from the competitive school life. For example, when I was in middle school, after exams were finished, I often went to sports center, and playing basketball games with my friends. Therefore, I could forget about my worries and relieved all my stress that was accumulated by exam.
All in all, because of two reasons I mentioned above, I firmly believe that children should not be competitive, but enjoy for fun in by playing sports games
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