Fast food or Homemade food
Now,the world economy is getting worse and worse, most of the world companies go broke and quit their business since they don't have enough money to keep their companies going. However, the profits of fast food restaurents, such as Mcdonald's, is still rocketing. Why does this happen?
My point of view on this issue is that eating fast food is way better than eating homemade food. This is because fast food is fast as well as cheap.
OK in general, but I still doubt the consequense of questionare openings. There isn't any significant grammer errors, but you sometimes used informal style of writing. For the speaking test, it may be Ok with it, but remember that this is a formal writing test for college entrances. You would NOT want yourself sounding like 12.
To start with, fast food is literally fast and is thus preferred by people living in the global world. As people are living in the global world changing faster than ever before, they have a limited amount of time to have a meal. Therefore, instead of eating time-consuming homemade food, people can reduce their eating time by fast food which only takes 30 seconds to be prepared and 5 minutes to be eaten up. Furthermore, people don't have to clean up the table whereas it is needed to do so when eating homemade food.
From my direct experience, i took plenty of advantages from eating fast food 3 years ago. That's because it was "A piece of cake" for me to hand my report in much earlier than the other peers did because i used to eat fast food every single day at that time so that i could have much more free time.
Still no significant grammer errors, but there seems to be some small gaps between the logic. And though the choice of example was nice, you seemed to be lost in the middle-soluton = Don't explain too long.
On top of that, not only is fast food faster but it is more money-saving . People find the cost of fast food is generally much cheaper than the cost needed to buy groceries to cook homemade food. Moreover, special vouchers are often offered, that makes the cost of fast food even lower.
As an example of it, my friend had had a lack of money and financial problem when he was a teenager but he found fast food attractiv to him because it was extremely cheaper than his total cost of homemade food in a month. Consequently, he saved a lot of money by eating fast food.
You kind of sound like when I first started to write. My paper used to be filled with my teacher's scribbling, "TOO WORDY!", or "Run-on-sentences!!!"....that goes the same to some of your sentenses. Readers can get confused in the middle reading them, and we surely don't want that to happen!!
To sum up, eating fast food is better than eating homemade food since fast food is faster and cheaper than homemade food.
All things considered, there is a reason why fast food is preferred by people all over the world: it is a great type of food for people living in the global world.
The conclusion is just a copy of your thesis. Paraphrase it!!