People learn more by watching television than reading books
It is often said that books allows-> allow people to approach many useful information because unlike TV books show the author’s in-depth knowledge. However, in my point of view, people are able to learn lots of things by watching television. This is because the visual image and sound of television is effective to convey the information efficiently and real-time broadcasting of television by using satellite provides people to current issues accurately and rapidly.
First of all, people learn effectively many information by television.-> 효과적으로 배우지만 그러므로 어떻다 라는 결론까지 내주세요 질문은 learn more이지 effectiveness가 아닙니다. It is obvious that the visual image and sound of television play a crucial role in transferring message to viewers. The reason is that unlike books depended on human’s imagination, visual and sound aids convey messages and information specifically and successfully. Let’s see Discovery channel.-> We can see this in the case of Doscovery channel. Discovery channel provides much information about science principles. Last time I watched the principle of space shuttle. Its visual and sound effects influenced positively on my understanding. -> 좋은 예시입니다만, visual 하고 sound effects에 관해서 집중하여 서술하는 것이 더 좋을 것 같습니다. 많은 과학정보를 제공한다, 스페이스셔틀에대해 나왔었다. 이런내용은 필요가 없는 내용이 될 수 있습니다. If I just rely on books to understand about its principle, it took for a long time.-> it will take a long time This implies that television gives people many chances to learn information efficiently.
In addition, television’s live broadcasting is helpful to give information to viewers accurately and quickly. The technology development related to television broadcasting effects on making vivid image and precise information on live. These factors make people possible to approach global information in real time. For example, Haita earthquake in 2010 broadcasted on television in real-time to many countries. The live features of television gives vivid feeling and atmosphere to viewer in real-time. This information by television boosted the global financial aids. Thus, the Haita earthquke’s damage could be minimized. This presents that television convey news and issues to views precisely and quickly.
-> 이 body는 주로 TV의 파급효과를 다루고 있지, precise and quick를 다룬다고 보기는 어렵습니다. 어떤 결론을 낼 것인지 안 상태에서는 그 결론을 유도해내기위한 논리의 정렬이 필요합니다.
In brief, television plays a significant role in conveying messages and news to people effectively and accurately by visual effects, sound aids and real-time effects. Therefore, I firmly believe that people are able to learn much information through television.