In modern society, a much amount of information influx in our living.-> 멋있게 표현하는 것은 좋지만, 간결하고 명확한것이 좋을때도 있습니다 :) much amount of information are flow into our daily lives. We should get an information of importance by exact ways because there is much wrong informaion.-> get, make, 이런표현없이 문장을 만드는것이 좋습니다. These information also include wrong ones so we need to filter them out. To discern good information, I claim that it is better way to read newspaper rather than watching TV.
-> 말씀하신대로 Off-topic이므로 뒤에는 열심히 쓰셨는데 안타깝게도 낮은점수가 나옵니다.
good information을 골라내는 것이 아닌 TV는 충분한 내용제공을 안한다가 topic이므로 주제와 맞지 않습니다. 주제랑 글내용이 제대로 부합하는것이 가장 가장 중요합니다. 아무리 수준높은 표현과 유창한 내용이 포함된 글이라도 다른얘기를 하면 반타작이 나오기 힘듭니다.
Some people prefer watching TV to get an information because it is easy way to access. If we turn on it in the living room, we always gain an information with a visual information. It is pretty interesting. People no longer need to spare time to read a newspaper or book for an information. However, this mechanism has a fatal weakness. Even if we can acess to information more easily, the reasons why I dislike watching TV to know the world events is that it does not give chance us to deliberate it. To be specific, when we watch it, we just see that with enougt thought or certain check . In fact, some studies are warning that we need to filter much information because by getting an information from tv media, we just accept it as it is. For this risk, I insist that newspaper can lead us to meditate some information whether it is wrong or right. Also it has a diverse point, which prompt us to be not biased.
Futhermore, newpaper is written by a person. I mean it is not visual or auditory medium. We can meet many different kinds of opinion from people with different back ground. It broadens our insight and view. The thing we can expect from it, we can more turn out some events and compare it with one's own idea. It migh help not only know an information but also improve ability to observe something. In addition, it has other meirt to carry it. We can read it anywhere and anytime. For this reason, I believe that newspaper is still prime way to get an information, even though there exist convenient tools to contact an significant information such as television and internet.
In conclusion, I think that newspaper is excellent, convenient and right way to contact the world events. Because it give allow for a time to read with more access and consider if it is right or wrong. For these reasons I believe that we are required to read a newspaper. |