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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Topic : Parents today are more invovled in their children's education than they were in the past. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay. | |
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An ongoing debate exists over wheter parents in these days are more involved in their children's education then the past. Some people say that parents in the past had more influence on their kid's education because ~ 해주시면 더 자연스러울듯. However, I think it is evident that today's parents are more related in education of their children. This phenomenon grows gradually in Korea due to the higher interest in private education and smaller number of children in a family.
In these days, there are supprisingly numerous and diverse type of private educations exists.-> 문법 So many students and even young children in korea are struggle for learn things at private educational institute and get private lessons at their home. Some children have to go to many institutes even after school. This is because parents want their child to grows up to be respectful person. -> childe to grow up and be a respectful person. And in modern society, it is really important to accumulate knowledge and learn a wide range of skills to recognized by many people. So parents became more and more want-> So parents became more and more involved with their kids to get a good grade in their studies, do better in sports class, play piano well and speak english well-> ,etc. Also, as scientists find that children have more ability to absorb a lot of knowledge than adults,-> that children have higher abilty of absorbing and learning informations and this is why parents's interst about early education became higher. In this sense, parents have apperently more attention to their kid's training.-> In this sense, in order to better educate their children, parents are prone to show more attention to their children.
In addition, parents in nowdays are tend to have less number of children.-> nowadays there are less number of children per household. In past, most parents had a lot of kids, so they could not afford to raise all children with high level of education.-> concentration. But recent study have shown that on the average, only two or one kids are living in a home nowdays. Therefore, parents have much more time and financial affordability. So it is taken for granted that all of their attention is given to their children's education.
All things considered, I think parents in these days have more related to trainging of their children-> parents these days are very closely involved in educating their children than past on the grounds that higher attention with private tutoring and institute and less number of kids in a home. Of course it is good for young students to have a chance to receive great quality of education, but an excessive study would be harm for them rather than help. | |
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