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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Some people think that all university students should be required to take at least one class that teaches the other country’s culture. However, I do not agree this statement for two reasons. First, there are better ways to learn the culture of other country. Secondly, teaching the culture might be able to make students get a prejudice.
Initially, Firstly, there is are various better ways to obtain the knowledge about other country’s culture. Teaching a culture by textbook is not a the best way to understand other culture. For example, visiting other country is more helpful. If we visit and experience another culture in person, we would not forget it and we could understand easily. I also had not known about Canada before I have visited there. However, when I was in Canada finally I was able to realize about Canada deeply. it is not until I went to Canada that I was able to know about Canada deeply.
Secondly, teaching the culture might be able to make students get a prejudice. Generally, the class cannot provide detail information with regard to other country’s culture, it just offers common knowledge. As a result, we could get prejudice as for other country. For instance, (so far)이동 I have learned that British men are gentle and kind so far. (Though)이동, some of my British friends are seldom gentle though. If I had never met those friends then, I would think that all British men are gentle.
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In conclusion, teaching the other country’s culture is not the best way to educate students and it can bring about get a prejudice.
That is why, I do not think that all university students should take a class that teaches the culture of other country other than their own. | |
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그리고 혹시 이정도면 15점 가능할까요..?ㅠ