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It is evident that in our society working condition has a tremendous importance in our live. Some people think that working in team is good, while others do not. I, however, believe that working with others is better than working alone. There are several reasons that I could discuss to support my argument. So I will limit my discussion to the two that I feel are most relevant to the topic : the concept of experience and relationship.
First of all, The most reason for my feeling this way is that other's experience is useful, when people work in team. This is because people get help from others in team. This is remind me of a time. When I was in college, I had to do a lot of homework. But However(But을 문장 시작할때 쓰면 좋지 않아요) i didn't have time. So Therefore(So를 문장 시작할 때 쓰는건 좋지 않아요) I made a team for study. They assumed homework in their respective better field??. After we did our part, we helped for each other. Finally we finished whole homework. As this experience This experience shows that working with others is efficient.
Also another reason for my thinking way is relationship. Relationship with others is very important in our society. Because Since(Because를 문장 시작할 때 쓰는건 좋지 않아요)you don't have to do a lot of thing without other's help in current society, and It is easy to do work with others. Therefore you need to raise your social skill, so if you work in team, you will make your relationship better and also do work efficiently. As result working in team is very useful.
All things considered, with the reasons mentioned above, I think that I have a sufficiently and adequately explained my position regarding this topic. Consequently, I prefer to work in team.
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