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It is evident that in our current society, getting a higher education has a tremdous importance in our lives. Some people think getting a university education is the most important factor for success in life while others do not. I however, believe that there are lots of other factos that are more important than getting a university education to success. There are several reasons that I could disucss to support my argument so I will limit my disucussion to the two that I feel are the most relevant to the topic: the concepts of interest and experience.
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First of all the most important reason for my feeling this way is the concept of interest. People tend to concentrate when they are doing what they really like. If they do what they do not want, efficiency of work will be decreased. For example, Bill Gates who made a famous computer soft program, Microsoft window, faild to graduate university. Since He was really into computer programing, he centered his mind on making a program. Finally, he became one of the most successful person in the world. I think the most important reason for him to became a successful person is that he did what he really wanted. If he kept study in university, he would not become a successful person.
Another reason for my thinking this way is the concept of experience. These days a lot of companies want to person who has a variety of experiences because these people are more helpful to the company than academic person. This reminds me of my brother who failed to get a job though he had a high GPA. He was famous for his high grades in school. Every one, including me, thought he will have a great job. However, not only he got a great job, but he failed to get a job???. He was so depressed. He emailed some companies why he did not employed. I still remember the reply. “We do not recuruit recruit person who only studied. In complex society we need person who experienced lots of difficulites.” After that, he is having a intern career and volunteer work. Though he is not employed yet, I surely believe he will have a great job soon.
For these reasons I disagree with the topic. I think getting a university education is not the most important factor for success in life.
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