■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay. | |
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Some people say that children have more advantages to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. However, I disagree that children live in the countryside for two reasons. First, there is less quality of education than a big city. Second, in emergency, it is hard for children to go to a big hospital.
Most of all, the quality of education is better in a big city than in the countryside. Of course, in the country, there are many natural tools of education. However, it is more important that children are educated in the school than in the nature. Let me take schools for example. According to law of demand and supply, good teachers and schools are concentrated to a big city, because a metropolis has more population than a rural area. Moreover, a big city could spend money educating to children through much taxes. This economical factors derive exceptional teaching to children, on the contrary, couldn’t do in the countryside. This shows that children have more advantages when they live in a big city.
Next, there are many big hospitals in a metropolis than in a rural area. It is commonplace that to live in the countryside is better, because of fresh air. Nevertheless, I argue that it is more harmful for children to live in the countryside. For example, if children are suddenly sick, we have to go to a big hospital which has many advanced medical devices, not cottage hospital. The hospital, in a metropolis, possesses many advanced medical implements as well as many proficient doctors. No doubt, a big hospital is better than cottage hospital. In this sense, children should live in a big city.
In conclusion, children should live in a metropolis for the reasons that I have mentioned above. First, children have more chance to advanced education. Second, there is medical advantage in a metropolis. | |
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