■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Topic :Governments should provide all of their citizens with free university education.
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Nowadays, many people goes to the university because just most of people thinks that university education is vital for success of life. On the other hand, many people who does not have a enough money cannot go to the university because of poverty. I believe that the government should makes the universities require no money for education so that many people who wants edcuation may study. There are some examples to support my opinion.
To start with, government should provide free university edcuation for the people to look out for the talent people. There are many people who really wants to study or talented in studying. However, some of these people cannot realize their dream because they have not enough money. In fact, the money required to the university education is sky high, therefore sometimes it is considered as a social problem. Moreover, this tendency keeps going. Therefore, more and more people who really wants university education do not take a appropiate university edcuation. If the government makes the universities to provide a education for free, the universities can get the people who really wants the studying and are talented. These people are also good for development of the country, therefore if governments let the people get university education freely, it will be profitable for the governments as well.
In addition, the citizens can save the money and live their life more effectively by free university edcuation. As time goes by, it is more highlighted to go to a university and study more just to get a high paying job. However, actually not so many job requires high quality of edcuation. Rather special technique and job experience is more important than university edcuation. In spite of that, many people goes to the university spending great amounts of money because every people goes to the university. This propensity is not desirable and even can be a social problem. On the contrary, if the government makes the university edcuation free, the people who wants edcuation but have not enough money will come to the university , therefore the purpose of university edcuation will find its proper place - education to get a expert education, not just a custom.
To conclusion, it is more benefitial for both the governments and people to make the university edcuation requires no money. If university edcuation is became free, many people whom university edcuation is really needed for can get the university edcuation. Moreover, the bad traditions and thinkings that university education is just for prepation of job employment wil be disappear. Accordingly, these phenomena will be profitable not only for growth of governments, but also of people. | |
441자 독립형 에세이구요, 모의시험에서 4.50점, 27점을 받았습니다.
바로 밑에 올린 독립형 에세이하고 비슷한 시간에 쓴 에세이인데 왜 점수차가 날까요?
그리고 왜 전 항상 27점이 한계일까요 ? 흑흑. 어디에 문제가 있는 걸까요?
모의시험에서 제출한 원본입니다. 아마 오탈자가 많을 것으로 예상됩니다..
아, 손이 꼬이는 줄도 모르고 모든 education을 edcuation이라고 적었습니다.(퇴고에서도 발견 못함) 근데 27점이면 감점이 적은 걸까요..ㅋㅋ 만약 education을 제대로 적었다면 더 좋은 점수가 나올 수 있었을까요?
고수분들의 조언 매우 바랍니다!