Although the life in campus is full of joy, students always face problems during the semester; It is, it has been, and it will be one of the problems for students to choose whether if they will stay in the dormitories or live in apartments near the school. Majority of students cannot make their minds easily; however, considering its convenience and apartments’ critical problems, living in the dorms seems to be a clever decision to me.
First off, dormitories are the nearest place to the school. Since universities require a large quantity of curriculums, assignments, and activities to students, it is absolutely convenient for pupils to stay near the campus. They can easily reach the universities and do research, use libraries to study or read, or get some assist from professors about their assignments. Whereas, the distance between the apartment and university, lack of facilities to get help during the semester may annoy students during the term.
Furthermore, dormitories do not have any stress about money, while living in the apartment is likely to be economically burden for students to pay the fee for apartments. Universities’ assignments are way different from that of high school or elementary school; they are academic and thus require a lot of efforts and time. Thus, they are running out of time and some of them may not be able to get a job to afford the fees for apartments. If students get a job to support them and not be able to concentrate on studying, it ultimately causes negative result. Students should at least not feel the pressure by financial problems.
Finally, the relationships between students and students, students and professors make student stay in dormitories. By living in dormitories, students communicate with others in university continuously. During that process, students learn lessons, experiences some new things which they have never experienced before, and keep in touch with their companions and teachers. Those relationships are even valuable when they graduate; friends in different fields can share information and assist each other in the society. Yet, the opportunity to get along with professors and students is way lower when students stay in apartments. Living in dormitories provides an important previlge.
I’d like to advice the students who worry about the place to live in; think about what we can get from staying in the dormitories. Instead of paying burdensome fees and being isolated from your friends, how about keeping in touch with others and professors, without any financial worries?
일단 빨간색 표시는 워드로 작업했을때 밑에 초록색 줄 뜬거 제가 고친 겁니다.
다른 문장에도 초록색 줄 그어진것들 있었으나 일부러 안 고쳤습니다.
위에서 제가 빨간색으로 표시한 것 중에 "easily;"이거 있죠, 저는 "easily," 이렇게 썼다가 에러라고 떠서 고친건데 왜 "easily;"가 되는지 아시는분 계시나요.
전 반드시 토플 105점을 넘겨야 합니다. 라이팅 25점 정도는 받아야된단 소리고요.
불쌍한 인생 건진다는 생각으로 첨삭좀 간곡히 부탁드릴게요. 복받으실거에요^^
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