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It is not too much to say that everything related to sports is popular. Not only adults but also youths and children are enthusiastic about sports stars, broadcasting, comics and the list goes on. In this sense, most children are likely to enjoy playing sports and even some of them spend much amount of their time to practice practicing sports. Even though some people think of spending too much time to sports as waste of time, I strongly believed believe that the disadvantages of practicing sports at young age are outweighed by the benefits for the following two reasons: to help to experience what society is and learn lifelong hobbies.
To begin with, practicing and playing sports at young age helps to learn what society is and how to do in society. Of course, children, as students, are supposed to study and playing sports seems to be as squandering time. On the other hand, children can foster a sense of team work and sacrifice during by playing sports. On top of that, during practicing sports, they can experience trying hard to attain the goal, undergoing discipline, and making up for the weak points, which go a long way towards fostering a sense of independence and responsibility. In this respect, experiencing sports is required for students to improve their personality.
Furthermore, sports practiced at young age could serve as a beneficial lifelong hobby afterward. People would be better to enjoy at least one sport as a hobby for both encouraging sociability and relaxing. According to a survey from the KRI(Korea Relationship Institute), 53% of socially successful people are pretty good at playing at least one sport as a hobby. Besides they think that the hobby helps them to foster strength, confidence, etc, which contributes to their success. The results suggest that learning a sport at young age is, in a way, needed.
Taken all things together, children should spend a great deal of time to practice practicing sports because of its benefits, providing experiences of society and pleasurable pastimes. As a matter of fact, children are supposed to focus on their work of study, but it’s a matter of course that having both is the best.
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