주제: 국내 여행울 하는것이 해외여행보다 더 도움이 된다.
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Some people believe that going on a trip abroad is beneficial than traveling in their own countries country. The reason why they support for their ideas is that it could be a good way to save money and learn about their countries. However, I disagree with that because it (it이 뭔가요 traveling to other countries 겠죠? ) exploring foreign countries will bring broader way of thinking and be helpful to adjust their own life goals.
First of all, traveling to foreign countries is a method to improve way of thinking. Concept of certain issues 어떤 화제의 컨셉? is affected by countries' own custom and 현재 주어는 concept of certain issues입니다. will make people build prejudice or stereotypes. It means that it causes making forms individuals' own views and way of thinking. Using my personal experience as an example, I traveled to Australia 3 years ago, and I had my own strict standard when it comes to falling in love that women should not propose their boy friends first. The reason why I think this way is that this is more likely to make men have prejudice that their girl friends are so into them, so they do not have to pour the efforts into them for love. 문법이 틀리긴 틀렸는데 문법때문에 뜻이 이해가 안가서 고칠수가 없네요. However, my stupid belief was broken when I met a French friend in Perth , Australia. She became my first foreign friend who I met accidently druing the trip and she gave different perspectives about love. Finally I changed my thinking and it was great experience to broad a way of thinking. Awkward.
In addition, it is really helpful to make our life long goals. Traveling to a wide range of countries gives opportunities to meet divergent diverse environment and is beneficial to build diverse relationship with many people who come from other countries. So at last travelers who go around other nations adjust their goals and dreams through these dynamic experiences. In my case, one of my friend had a life long dream to become a English teacher and studied a lot, but her plan was thrown away while she was going on a trip to America. At that time she had a chance to participate in one of the famous professor's international relationship among developing countries class in stanford university, and she knew realized that being a teacher was not her real dream, It was just her parents' goal parents' goals for it. Thus even though she had studied to become a teacher for a long time, she decided to go to America for studying international relationships. And now she is working at NGO in New York in the U. S
In conclusion, I feel that trip to other countries is good way to avoid a narrow thinking and helpful to have real life long dream or goals. For these reasons I disagree with the statement that traveling around their own countries is better than traveling to other countries.