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Childhood is the happiest time in one's life. It is often said that childhood is not the happiest time in one's life. Some people may oppose this statement because childhood is less required requires less responsibility. However, in my opinion, adulthood is better than childhood. This is because children have to study hard, and they have a lot of limitations.
To begin with, children have to study eagerly in order to have successful career. In my opinion, the time is prepare time for their future. the time is used to prepare for the future. So, in Korea, many students are thaught early education such as english, math, and reading. But, at almost half of students are pressured theses studies. In addition, they even say that because their excessive studies they want to be adult. For example, when I was in elementary school, I suffered a lot of difficulty because of exam. During that time, I had an exam about required courses. The exam gave me a lot of stress. So, I thought that lf I have my child, I will make the child freely in study.
Moreover, they have a lot of limitation in their actions. Children have a lot of things they want to do but they can not do it because of that limitations. In contrast, adulthood do not have limitations in their behaviors, works and thinking. so, this reason can explain why children want to be adults. According to the Ministry of Health and Welfare of Korea in 2007, adults said that they can be able to do everything without limitation. whereas, children keeps on complaining about limitations. Studies have indicated that childhood is not the best time in there life.
To sum up, though everyone may hold a different position in this issue, I am in favor of my idea that adulthood is better than childhood. The reasons are that children have to study, and they have a lot of limitations
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