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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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In your opinion, what are some important characteristics of a co-worker (someone you work closely with)? Use reasons and specific examples to explain why these characteristics are important. | |
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In the past, a man of great ability was able to do work by oneself and succeed by one's own ability. Nowadays, however, as the world becomes more and more complicated, every person should cooperate with each other to accomplish a project or the growth of a company-> 일반적인 얘기를 하고있었으므로, accomplish a goal 같은 광범위한 목적어가 좋을듯 싶습니다.. Therefore, to choose a proper co-worker is essential. A co-worker should be a -> an honest, open, and capable person.
The most important characteristic is honesty. In working society, not every person can be a friend. One should compete with other people to achieve something. In this situation, a co-worker should be a friend who pursues profit for both.-> In this kind of fierce competitive environment, it is highly challanging to find someone you can trust and depend on because everyone focuses on accumulating their own profit. 같은 문장을 쓰시면 앞문장의 보충설명도 되고 뒤에 문장과도 연결이 부드러워집니다 :) A firm trust between co-worker and one should be built. Then, they will be able to talk freely about a project or a novel idea. They will work as best as they can, since they know that one's co-worker is genuinely co-worker not a competitor.
With the honesty-> 단순히 with honesty하면 honesty를 사용하여, 라는 의미에 가까우므로 combined with honesty,, a co-worker should also be a person with an open mind. To work together is meaningful when one listens to each other's opinions to get the best way and solution. It doesn't matter whether one is a boss and another is the lowest member. When they work as a co-worker, they should have an attitude that all of their opinions are valuable regardless of one's position. Only in that condition, the best synergy effect will be arisen.
Although the former two points were gratified if a co-worker does not have enough ability to perform work he or she cannot be a good co-worker. In science, co-workings between laboratories with various fields are done frequently. Anyhow, to have a good scientific result, both laboratories should be able to provide novel ideas, perform experiments, and analyze data. Only when good mathematicians, computer majors, and biologists work together, computational biology can be developed.-> General 한 co-worker의 특성을 이야기하다 갑자기 science, biology 같은 특정분야에 관해서만 이야기하면 development가 아닌 degression이기 때문에 감점요인이 될 수 있습니다.
It is said that if one has a true friend in one's life that life is succeed. It can also be applied to a work. If one has a good co-worker one's business will be prosper. Therefore, one should try hard to find a co-worker whom one can believe, share ideas freely, and get help when works. Besides, one should endeavor that oneself can be a co-worker with those requirements. | |
일부러 쫌 어렵게 느껴지는 주제를 고르긴 했는데
진짜 넘 어려워요 ㅜㅜ
상세한 예시를 들라고 했는데 학생이라 그런지 딱히 예시를 들만한게 떠오르지 않아요...
시간도 30분을 넘겼구요...
이런 주제가 나오면 어쩌나 걱정이 되네요....
이정도로 쓰면 몇점정도 나올까요?
-> 이런 주제가 나왔을때는 괜히 어렵게 생각하지 마시고,
쉽고 당연한 것들을 생각해보세요. 그러면 설명하기도 쉽고 전개해나가기도 쉽겠죠. 이유가 너무 쉽다고해서 감점받는 경우는 없습니다 :)
튜터님 항상 감사드려요~~~