Spending money for leisure activities is better than saving money
In modern society, it has been easier for people to have their own free time as the development of the economy. In this sense, some people insist that spending money for leisure activities is better than saving money for the future. However, I disagree with the given statement because there are some situations where we would need money rather than pleasant activities in the future.
First of all, people could lose a job because of the downturn of the economy. With the worse economic state than the past, Korea has suffered from it since the nation’s economy relies heavily on the trade with other country. In this respect, most firms have tried to reduce the number of staff. Almost 200 companies enlisted in Korean stock market have a plan to cut down the number of their employees. Every workers, especially whose age is more than forty’s, would not guarantee they can maintain their job status. In this sense it is important to prepare the time after getting fired. My uncle, whose age is 42, was recently said that he should quit his job in Hyundai. He expected that, but the problem is that he does not have enough money to live on his own. He always spent money on his free time, traveling abroad.
Secondly, the Korea has medical care service is expensive for the elders. Korean government put emphasize on the development of the economy. The country accomplished economic success which most developing countries took more than a century for a few decades. However, it has neglected to the public welfare including medical care for the old people. In this sense, most elders have to prepare for keeping their health condition by collecting money because they have to spend a lot of money for examining or treating their disease. According to the national survey conducted by department of sanitation, more than 56% of elders in Korea are not financially stable to receive the medical service.
To sum up, I firmly believe that Spending money for leisure activities is not better than saving money because there are several situation where we need money : to lose a job, to prepare for steep medical care service.
인트로와 결론이 약하시다고 하셨는데, 시간에 쫓기다보니까 또 부실해진 것 같습니다.
인트로와 결론을 잘 쓸 방법 없을까요? ㅜㅜ.(물론 바디 잘쓰는 방법두요. ^^;;;)
감사합니다~