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There has been an ongoing debate whether universities should invest their resources into students’ sports activities equal to into their libraries. While some agree with the equal investment because universities should provide means to develop students’ physical health as well as social skills, I definitely disagree with the equal allocation of finances not because sports are not important but but because of factors might affect students' satisfaction statue, in addition to the consideration of the criteria of companies on universities’ graduates.
To begin with, the same resource allocation into library and sports activities will deteriorate students’ satisfaction. In order to efficiently benefit student body, university should invest into more frequently used facilities. In many universities, students’ use of library outweighs their participation in sports. Virtually every student uses libraries for various reasons such as referring books and studying or even entertaining throughout semesters. However, there are limited numbers of students who regularly do sports. That is why the resources need to be distributed proportionally not equally. A study shows that while students participate in sports less than 5 hours a week in a regular base, five times greater number of students usually uses library minimum twenty hours per week. It is obvious that library needs more resources than sports activities do. If the invest is carried out in the same way, it will deteriorate students welfare, thus students’ complaints will multiply.
Moreover, academic achievement is the most important quality of university education in which library plays a pivotal role as fostering students’ learning such as providing a variety of books and data including each major and foreign languages, spaces for studies and seminars, skills to improve on their reports, even entertainment to relieve their stress. A study shows that companies prefer as their new employers who own competence in professional knowledge and foreign languages. In this trend, libraries has more important role than sports activities, thus needs more resources than sports.
In brief, I definitely disagree with the equal resource distribution to library and sports activities.
Libraries should have more resources not only because the same distribution could cause students’ dissatisfaction but because it could weaken students’ achievement in academic area. All in all, having better libraries are much more beneficial to students.