the news media is a reliable source of unbiased information
As techonology develops at a fast rate, people are living start living in a more confomtable more comfortably and getting more services from that new techonology. Thus, in the last 100 years, we got invented new products like a TV and the Internet. Through that devices, we can earn meet more information and have more strong voice in the society than before. This That is why people are swamped by the vast flow of infomation that is instantly updated after some happening. Since there are too many much information, people cannot help telling telling the truth from false information became more difficult. Incersingly,However, they believe what the news media says is always true and accept it naturally. However, is it always good to believe news media is true?
토플치고는 너무 정교한 인트로 같아요. 인트로에 너무 공들이지 마시고 right to the point ! 그냥 바로 토픽을 말해도 어색하지 않아요. 토플이니깐요. ^^ 그리고 길긴 긴데 바디1,2의 내용이 하나도 없어요 ;ㅅ;
Every news media is owned by stock owners and operated by some excutives. It means that stock ownners hope to get more benefits form owning the news media, so they are easily allured to force the news media to say biased for their interest. This could be true, since information should be written on a newspaper or broadcast on a TV by people. Hence, if some event happen and it is not good for stock owners, the news media usually do not speak about too much, or give suspicious voice to viewers about the event to make them to be suspicious about the event , either. This well represents that the news and information from the news media can be changeable and make people believe it, becacuse fact should not be changed but opinion for it can be changeable.
What is more, the news papers are controlled by some excutives who want to increase their news media's earnings. With regard to main source of earning, the news media get most of their earning from selling advertisements. In terms of advertisements, the more the news media have subscribers, the more firms should pay to advertise their products on the news media. Thus, as people can easily imagine, the news media might try to get as much attention from people as possible, and so as to do it they do not care to send news in a sensentaional and instinctive way and prefer to do it rather to send boring but siginificant information.
볼드체로 표시한 부분이 소주제 같은데 찾기 힘들게 되어있어요. argument를 build하는 건 좋은데 reason1,2를 첫줄에 쓰고, 인트로에도 쓰면 좋을 것같아요 ! 중요한 내용을 맨 앞에 쓰면 점수매기는 분들이 더 편하기도 하고 에세이 자체가 명확해보여서 점수가 잘나와요 :)
The news media seems to trustworthy, because they provide updated, diverse, and much information. However, we should not believe every information from the news media, since it does not always give a fact. That is why we may readily see some news that the news media apporogizs about false information of news few days ago. Therefore, the news media is not reliable source of unbiased information for above reasons.