■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Topic : Getting advice from friends of an older age would be more valuable than from friends your own age. | |
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In general, when problems or worries occur to people, they want to receive advise from other people. Some people said that friend who is same age comprehends their troubles rather than older age. However, in my point of view, if people who have some problems require help to older age people, they can accept more enough advices than same age friend.
To begin with, older age people have a lot of experiences in their life, so their advices are more helpful to younger people. Usually, older age people have experienced that Younger people have problems in their life. Therefore, older age people contribute appropriate advices to younger people’s troubles. For example, when I prepared to apply for university before graduate high school, I concerned what kind of major appropriate thing is to me, so I required advice how to choose major to older age friend who study in the university. He recommeded book what to help him when he had same problem like me, and I could find useful information about major. I was able to decide my major through his book. If I asked same age friends about this worry, I did not receive enough advice to them.
Second, when younger people require help to older people, older age people pay attention for younger people’s worries. Typically, older people can consider new opinions and ideas because they have diverse experiences and comfortable mind through many kinds of social activities, so when younger people want suggestion to older people, older people seriously focus on younger people’s problem. For example, I studied speaking about second language, I seriously worryed my pronunciation because incorrect pronunciation could not change myself. I did not have enough money for tutor so, I told these worries to my aunt. She heard enough time about my worries, and she endeavored to solve my problem with me. I was able to meet my aunt’s friend who have good language skill through my aunt’s effort. This example shows that if younger people say their worries to older people, older people concern their worries with them.
In breif, if younger people requir herp and suggetions to older age people, older age people provide appropriate recommendation through their experience, and they pay attention and concern with younger people. Finally, I strongly believe that older age people contribute appropriate advices rather than same age friends. | |
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