the best way to learn about life is by listening to the advice of friends and family.
After Since the industilization, everything has been drastically changing. In order to survive today, people cannot help but to try trying to learn as much as possible. Thus, it this causes people to value school's education and getting high scores from the school more than ever. While learning and absorbing new knowledge, they easily believe that they can learn everything they need to only learn what they need from schools without notice. This would cause people to ignore family and friends who may give priceless advice to them. In addition, since people are getting busier, they must not have enough time to communicate with their friends and family. The less people meet their friends and family, the less they feel friendly with their family and friends.
관련된 이야기는 많은것 같은데, 정작 중요한 포인트를 집어내지못한 인트로인것같아요. Topic을 클리어하게 써주세요 ^^
As a the society asks people to be more competitive, people only hope to learn what will help their future career. Thus, they prefer to go to a school and some priviate institutions and get used to believing that those places are only place where they will learn what they need. As a result, people are becoming smarter and more competitive as workers not humans. Since well-educated workers do not focus on developing their another psychological side face, they are easily frustrated and do not have strong self-confidence on themselves. Hence, the rate of suicide is increasing since they feel themselves as robots to only work.
점점 주제를 벗어나는 느낌이에요 ..ㅠㅜㅠ
사람들이 친구/가족들을 소중히 안한다는 전제하에 왜그럴까 파헤치는 주제로 쓰셨어요 ! 토픽은 인생공부하는 가장 좋은방법이 친구/가족들의 이야기를 듣는것이다. 인데, 아무래도 오프토픽 같네요 ㅠㅠ
Why this happens to people even though they do not waste their time and they believe they work with without stopping? The first reason is that people do not have develop their inner minds. Teachers in schools and private instituions are people who get paid by students, so they do not think that they should care for their students for all the time even though some believe that teachers are supposed to do it. These teaceher's behaviors make them to teach their students only studies not why they should study and why they should study. Under this condition, the only people who can teach answers for those questions are friedns and family. Since people spend many time with family and friends and family live more than them. their friends and family can give a good advice about life or whatever question about life people will have. This will help them look over their past lives one more time and give them chance to self-criticize.
As everything is changing so fast and peole are seriouly competing each other, people easily igore to develop their inner minds. People are not born to only work, but to enjoy their lives. Money from working is just method to help people enjoy. People should not forget this looking basic but significant instruction and we have family and friends who can give invaluable advice and instruct us on our psycological mind. Therefore, I believe we should value learning from family and friends.