■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Topic :It is better to spend time with one or two close friends than with a large number of friends.
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There is an old saying "If a person has only a real friend, he has been living a successful life." I think it is important for people to have a real friend in their life too. However I think people have to spread their relationship, because people can enjoy new relationship with others who they haven`t met before, and they can see some problems in a new aspect by others .
First of all, I think people have to have time with a number of friends, because if someone meets only friends who they have met, it might be hard for them to do new experience. I was actually sort of computer addicted person. I had only friends like me, we always did internet game such as 'World Of War Craft' together. One day I met a friend, he was a kind of amateur music artist. I have been affected by him, although I am not in touch with him anymore, I am learning playing guitar and I enjoy a new hobby. If I didn`t meet him, I think I would never tried to play guitar.
Second of all, I think wide relationship makes people see a problem in different way. If people see a problem in different way, the solution which is never seen before could be found relatively easily. One time I got a harsh time. I didn`t know what to do, and friends of mine couldn`t come up with solution in that situation either. When I get lost in my life, my friend`s friend gave me a advice, it was really fresh to me and it was the most effective to me among the solution proposed by my friends who know me well.
To sum up, I think people would better to have wide relationship, because they could enjoy a little more dynamic life, and wide range relationship would give them unexpected but very effective solutions on their problem. | |
인도 유학생님, 튜터 에이 님 저번에 첨삭 감사합니다.. it was the most effective to me among the solution proposed by my friends who know me well. 이문장도 관계대명사( 맞나?) 이중으로 나오는데 이정도는 괜찮겠지요?
매번 첨삭해주시는 분들 말씀 귀기울여 가며 하고 있습니다.. 근데 이번에도 쓰고 나니 저번에 튜터 에이님이 지적해주신 내용상 문제가 반복 된 느낌이네요..
읽어주신 분들 모두 감사합니다..