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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Topic :
University athletic apartment should receive the same amount of funding as university
libraries.
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There has been an ongoing debate over whether or not university athletic apartments have to receive
equal amount of money as the university libraries. Mnny Many people, perhaps most , are against this stance that universities have to focus on academic fields. However, others may assume that it is more important to students in that physical health is the order of priority in modern society. I agree with the latter position.
First of all, I think that people are able to everything on in good , healthy condition that healty is good. It is very eviednt to students in school life. A research study ,conducted by the Korea medical association, showed that a university policies that for increasing physical functions increase are successful to on students' physiclal health as well as academic performance. I also have an experience that my grade was upgraded to with advanced skills.
But, even the assumption above is very plausible. People who disapprove aganinst my idea may argue that academic subjects are more important than the athlentic apartments. They say that modern society fastly is developing. Therefore, we must always be ready for many things required in society. I tatally concede this. Yet, I still put an emphasis on my idea because there is one more important matter to consider.
If athletic education in the universities is unsufficient, it is a lot of harmful to growing a member of the a national team. Players are representatives to our the country. If our the country players do not have good grades, Universities are responsible for the results. Also, the athletic educations are important roles to people preparing the future in that they will be able to change their dream and determine the future.
To sum up, although everyone may hold a differnt position on this issue, I am in favor of the idea that Universities are equal to investment to the physical fields.
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얼~ 많이 늘었어요. 관계대명사 that 앞에 전치사 쓰면 안되구요. 될 수 있음 our country 이렇게 쓰지 마세요.
한국이면 한국, 아니면 그냥 국가는 이렇게 가요. 만약 정말 we를 쓰고 싶으면, 처음에 쓸때 정의 하세요.
my country , South Korea, ~~~~ 이렇게요. our country는 맞지 않아요.
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