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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Topic :It is better to spend time with one or two close friends than with a large number of friends.
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There is an old saying "If a person has at least one true friend, only a real friend, he has lived has been living a successful life." I think it is important for people to have a real friend in their life too. :too라고 동의 하지 마시고 이 격언이 정확한건 아니다~ 라고 하면 더 좋을듯 :) However I think people should have to spread their relationship, because people can enjoy new relationship with others who they haven`t met before, and they can see some problems in a new perspective aspect by others .
First of all, I think people have to spend time have time with a number of friends, because if someone meets only friends who they have met before, it might be hard for them to have do new experience. Take my experience as an example. I used to be addicted to computer games and I was actually sort of computer addicted person. I had only friends like me. We always played did internet games such as 'World Of War Craft' together. One day I met a friend, who he was a kind of amateur music artist. I have been affected by him, although I am not in touch with him anymore, He influenced me in a positive way and now I am learning playing to play guitar and I enjoy have a new hobby. If I have not didn`t meet him, I think I would never have tried to play guitar.
Second of all, I think wide relationship makes people see a problem in a different way. If people see a problem in different way, the solution which is has never seen before could be found relatively easily. One time I was in trouble.=>좀 구체적으로 쓰면 좋을듯:) got a harsh time. I didn`t know what to do, and friends of mine couldn`t come up with solution in that situation either. When I get lost in my life, a friend of my friend my friend`s friend gave me a advice(셀수없는명사), and it was really fresh to me and it was and the most effective one to me among the solutions proposed by my friends who know me well.
To sum up, I think it would be better for people would better to have wide relationship, because they could enjoy a little more dynamic life, and wide range relationship would give them unexpected but very effective solutions on their problem. | |
인도 유학생님, 튜터 에이 님 저번에 첨삭 감사합니다.. it was the most effective to me among the solution proposed by my friends who know me well. 이문장도 관계대명사( 맞나?) 이중으로 나오는데 이정도는 괜찮겠지요?
매번 첨삭해주시는 분들 말씀 귀기울여 가며 하고 있습니다.. 근데 이번에도 쓰고 나니 저번에 튜터 에이님이 지적해주신 내용상 문제가 반복 된 느낌이네요..
읽어주신 분들 모두 감사합니다..