> > 2010-05-30 12:05:47, '' 님이 쓰신 글입니다. ↓
■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? parents are the best teachers. |
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? parents are the best teachers.
Nowadays, an increasing a large number of people believe that parents are the best teachers because they can teach student about life. However, I believe that parents are not the best teachers for students because their knowledge is limited and they do not cannot understand students very well.
To begin with, parents cannot be best teachers to for students. The rationale behind this is that since the knowledge of parents parents' knowledge is limited and it is more specific in their work, it won’t will not be helpful to for students. For example, when a student is having problem with a chemistry question is faced with difficulties, I do not think most parents can help with that them. Even though they might have learned it before, their memory eventually fades. in between decades after their graduation.
Additionally, when parents would like to talk with students about various problems in of a school, they parents cannot help them properly completely. When I was little a young boy, I used to talk about my problems with my parents to get some advises. However, as I was getting older, for most of the time, I started visiting school advisors to solve a problem. It is largely good enough because since the situation and struggle has become became different from old days, parents’ advises from their school times do not really help me. Instead of listening to my parents' struggles and way to solve, a school advisor who has was faced with numerous problems through his/her long period of working is more reliable.
To sum up, parents are not the best teachers for students. In fact, I believe that school advisors and teachers are the best, since their experiences and knowledge is more suitable trustful for students’ problems. That is why there is guidance office in every most schools. You see that we are sometimes faced with serious problems that we cannot talk to our parents. something like a relationship or marks. | |
이 전의 글에도 첨삭해드렸듯이,
~와 마주하다, 그냥 face가 아니고 "be faced with" 입니다. "run into" ~에 빠지다. 이것도 좋은표현이니 참고하시구요^^
위에서 쓰신 has become은 시제가 맞지 않습니다. has become은 "예전부터 되어왔다. 현재 그런상태이고. 아직도 완료 되지않은. 즉 앞으로도 될수있는" 이러한 뜻입니다. 위에 님께서 하고싶은말은 단순과거니 became 이 맞구요.
an increasing number of people 이말 자주 쓰시는것 같은데.
증가하고있는 사람들은 믿는다. 한국말로해도 아주 어색하죠? 많은 사람들은 믿는다. 라는 표현으로 꼭 바꿔주세요~
수고하셨습니다^^