Nowadays, an increasing number of people believe that doing as what others do would lead them to succeed. However, I believe copying others would not help people to succeed because when you follow others there will be less chance to succeed and only make you suffer.
바디1은 소주제를(reason1)을 *creativity is the key to success these days 로 바꾸는 게 좋을 것 같아요. 앞부분은 좀 오프 토픽으로 보일수 있어요 ~ However, 로 시작하는 문장부터 Their success was possible로 시작하는 문장 부분에 focus해서 창의적이지 않으면 요즘은 성공하기 힘들다 !라는 이야기를 주로 써주세요.
To begin with, do as what others do would only decrease the possibility to success. If peope do exactly same as you, they would also get the same result or a small portion of difference. Of course there would be some difference since everyone's potential is different. In other words, your success would be limited since everyone would get same opportunity. However, if you do something different thing, the chance of winning will increase dramatrically. In our society, we see lots of successful people in many areas. Their success was possible since they found something new instead of old. For example, lets say you invented something that is as useful as the internet. Obviously, everyone would like to try for it, and it will make you to succeed because there are not any competitors in that area.
바디2는 완전 오프 토픽인것같네요 ㅠ ㅠ 모두가 다 똑같이 생활해야 좋을까/아닐까 에 대한 에세이 같네요 ㅜㅜ , "남들과 똑같이 한 사람은 성공할수 있다/없다" 여기 토픽에서 벗어났어요.
On the otherhand, if you live same as the others, it will make you suffer. The rationale behind this is that when people acts the same, eat same food, learn same material, and think the same, they would never think of something new that can change their life. The society would stay as the same all the time. Also, the success of one's is not a big deal since everyone would get the same thing. It would be like a... society based on communism.
To sum up, best way to succeed is do something different from others. If you do same as others, that means you are limiting yourself from growing, within the boundary of others' limit. Indeed, famous scientist is some what looks like a crazy person to the others. Like a Thomas Edison. |