Since the last century, Watching Television has become a routine for almost every person most people. By watching television, people could obtain the most updated information as well as amusement. However, I believe that (that 넣어주세요^^에쎄이입니다.) watching television is not benefitial for children because children need should study and develop on their talents.(develop their talents 하면 말그대로 그들의 재능을 키운다 라는뜻이구요. develop on their talents하면 그들의 재능으로 인해 아이들이 자란다 라는뜻입니다. 주의하세요^^)
To begin with, television is not valuable for children. In fact, it is more like a poison on negative for children. During the childhood, children need to develop themselves physically. Since their body keeps growing until high teen, an outdoor activity is important factor on in,for(in 이라고 하시면 성장면에서 좋다는것이고, for 이라고 하시면 성장을 위해 직접적으로 좋다입니다.) growth. Plying sports is profitable in all aspects.(제가 추가해드렸어요^^)For example, it seems that playing basketball helps children to become fit and strong. In addition, by being part of a team, young people learn to work with others. Therefore, if they keep practicing excercise themselves for some specific sports, one day they might find it interests and talents. If that is the case, the child’s their dreams would be set for a famous athlete.
There are varieties of professional players, and they usually earn big salaries and become famous.
If children spend too much time in watching television, without going outside and do some exercise, (말이 이어지지 않습니다.)it will would be cause of health problem.
Secondly, children need to shoud be focused on their time in studying. As I have mentioned above, children grows during especially childhood. However, their growth is not only limited in their body, but also they grows mentally as well. I know that some programs, such as “National Geography”, actually help children to learn something, but only a small number of children watch it. Since it is too stiff,(뒤에 내용은 전혀 필요없는 문장이에요. 그냥 it is too 딱딱하기때문에, 라고만 쓰면 되는데 which같은걸 써서 길게 늘리셨네요. 감점이에요.^^;) documentary which is too rigid and serious, children rather choose to watch less serious programs such as animations, and or dramas. which are very addictive. After watching those invaluable materials programs for a long time without learning any specific aim, they will would just slack off compare waste their valuable time.(동사가 두개이구요, 무슨말을 하시고싶어하시는지^^;)with the others who read books.
Childhood is one of the most important periods for people because children most people grow physically as well as mentally during the period. As a result, I think that Instead of spending their time in watching those useless programs, they should find more productive activities, such as reading books, and exercise, to develop their potentials for the future. |