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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Topic :It has recently been announced that a large shopping center may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer .
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There has been an ongoing debate over whether or not a large shopping center does not has have to built in my neighbrhood. Many people, perhaps most , are agaist against this stance (that a the large shopping mall has to built in my neighborhood)이거 중복되니깐 안써도 되겠죵? because of a lot of benefits. However, others may assume that a the large shopping center does not need to built in my neighborhood. I agree wiht with the latter position. (쉬운 스펠링 철자 주의요망)
First of all, The large shopping center does not has to built .( 이 문장 계속 반복되고 있죠? the shopping center로 받아도 되고, building 으로 받아도 되고, construct 를 이용해도 되고 여러 단어를 다양하게 쓰심 더 좋을 것같아요. ) To be specific, If a shopping mall is built, the local's residents must be affected bad situations. For example, the local reseidents are faced with They would face problems like the congestion of population , numerous noisy and smoke pollution. Also, For example, Incheon Namdongu Guwoldong in Korea has shown that many shopping centers are quickly built. that The local city have has been faced with the environmental pollution. It is was unexpected situations to people .very have been confuced.
But even the assumption above is very plausible, people who disapprove my idea may argue that it is good because of economical economic reasons.If a The shopping center is built they are needs to many workers people who work the shopping mall. Naturally, the local's residents will can have work places. Also, nearby stores are affected by could attract many consumers. Accordingly they will agree the suggestion.(같은 문장이 뭐 바뀌는 것 없이 계속 나오면...좋지 않겠죠?) firmly believe that a shopping center has been built in my neighborhood. I totally concede this. Yet, I still put an emphasis on my opinon because there is one more important matter to consider.
My neighborhood(local area) does not enought developed is not developed in that transportation and nearby environment.
These conditions are very harmful rather than beneficial good. To begin with, the government has to accumulate the information about how many conditions are need to built a the large shopping mall. For example, cars, bus, subways, local resident's reaction, nearby stores, price of estate and air condition.
To sum up, although everyone may hold differnt position on this issue, But, I am for the idea that a large shopping center does not has have to built in my neighborhood.
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이번에는 내용도 신경썼는데..ㅠㅠ 이정도로는 안되겠죠?? |
제 생각에 에이미 님이 처음이셔서, 글쓰실때 너무 성급하게 서두르실 필요없다고 말씀드리고 싶어요.
처음 주제보고 structure 잡고, 살을 붙혀 나가잖아요. structure 정하시고, 시간에 구애받지 마시고 우선 문법에 맞에 철자 틀리지 말고 써보시는 연습을 하시라고 말씀드리고 싶어요. 왜냐면, 시험장가서 만약에 시간내에 다 글을 끝맺음 못했다고 빵점을 주지 않아요. 끝맺음을 못해도 점수는 어느정도 나온답니다. ^^ 물론 완벽히 끝내면 넘넘 좋죠.
안타깝게 아시는 단어도 철자를 틀리시거나, be동사 일반동사 둘다 쓰시고...그럼 채점자는 더 낮은 점수를 줄거에요.
오늘두 일요일인데, 공부하시느라 수고하셨어요. ^^ 항상 아자!!