Many children spend most of their major time on watching television. It contains broadcasts various programs programmes such as the news,entertainments entertaining TV shows and educational ones. It gives severe addiction to childrens. Children are severely addicted to these programs. The debate that whether television is useful or not is really controversial heated all over in the world. Anyway it gives many benefits values to children in some cases. Therefore I disagree with the topic that watching television has no value for children.
First of all, television contains such programmes which is harmful for children.They show obscenes and violences.By watching these, children get influenced and exercise accordingly.In this sence, it is not useful but it is wrong statement that it has no value.
Beside these bad effects, there is the educational programmes which is very useful for childrens.Children also benefits from these programmes and can obtain the knowledges.Also when one has any problem in any subject, one can clarify the doubt through television.
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Second, since television contains topics that children talk about in school, it is helpful for socializing. the main subjects that children talk about with their peers are sources from television.They chiefly talk about celebrities,dramas and movies.It somebody didn't watch television previous day,he will have difficult time to join the conversation going on with his peers.Therefore to maintain the relationship with friends, it is neccessary to get the knowledges from television.Also children is required to refresh their brains after the studying.Watching television gives relax to our body and make person peacful.
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To sum up,I strongly contradict with the topic about no value.it means there is no useful factor for children but referred to my opinions, it gives certain values to the childrens.
I think the topic doesn't make any sense to me.Obiviously children should watch television after their work done.They should not addicted by television.They have to set the time limit for watching television to avoid the defect of eye sights. |