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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Topic :Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Only people who earn a lot of money are successful | |
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Average people think that rich people is the most successful people in their life. this trend is common through from children to adult. but I don't think like that.(I don't agree 가 좋겠죠) I think that the most succesful people in their life is people who think feel enjoy happy life. (의도하는 바가 이것이 아닐까해서)
First of all, We can't buy happiness by with money or other things. Taking happy is not a problem associated with related to money. for example, One person is very rich. His feeling about his life is not happy but gloomy. can he buy happiness from supermarket? No. he can't.(축약으로 쓰지 마시고 모두 다 쓰시는게 좋아요 ^^) we can feel happy through haealthy healthy mind. also, in my opinion, if we are very happy without money, it enables us to live more simply. I truly belive believe that complex living is not good for people.
Secondly, there are so many standards of rating people's succesfulness success. for exmaple, good job, good family, good friend , and more.. varius Various things can make our life successful. of couse, Although we live in broad house as we have a lot money to but house,(but은 접속사에요) if we have no good friend or family, we can't feel we are succesful. successful. I saw a newspaper talked that one african country is more happier than south korea. why? they have no money to build big build like us. like this, varius standards of succesfulness existed.
In conculsion, Money can make us happy. but it is not ony thing can make us happy. if we concentrate on only money , we can be dangerous by many reasons. this reasons are common idea for average people. because we can see some people who only focus on money lost their money or lost their friends, family.. it is sad. so I don't agree that succesful people is not only people who have much money. |
이거 쓰는데 20분도 안걸린것같습니다;;(10분정도??) 그냥 생각나는데로 적어봤어요..
해커스 베이직인강 시작했고요..
2학기쯤에 단과로 라이팅 스피킹 학원 다니려고 하고있습니다.
그전에 문법공부부터 해놔야겠죠? ㅠㅠ..
아니면 첨삭강의같은거 시작해서 첨삭 받아봐야될까요 지금부터?.. 리딩하기 바빠서요..기말고사가 다가와서 ㅠ |
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지나가다 잘 읽어보고 갑니다.