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We often see TV commercials to that attract babies' attention such as using fascinating small cars or sweets for kids. I insist that these television advertisements directed toward children under the age of five should be prohibited. First, they are psychologically unstable. In addition, they tend to make irrational decisions during lifetime.
(First~~In addition도 괜찮지만 접속사로 한번에 연결시켜주는것도 추천합니당)
First, it is children under the age of five who are mentally unstable. At first glance, it may seem that purchasing a product is not involved with children because the decision of buying a product is independent from children, but dependent on their parents. However, it is a widely accepted view that most parents cannot bear their children's teasing. I agree with this view from personal experience, as my younger cousin's house was full of sweets. Since my cousin was seduced by TV commercials about chocolate, he tried his best to persuade his parents to bring chocolate into his house. As such, in order to make children have balanced life, TV commercials need to be banned.
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In addition, TV commercials at an early age of people can make them to make irrational choices. It cannot be said that some people can distinguish proper products according to their current needs. However, what is true is that people experiencing TV commercials when young make improper decisions for the rest of their life. According to the survey conducted by 'the Korea Times', almost 50 % of people addicted to 'Ghana', a Korean chocolate brand, had experiences of watching Ghana's TV commercial when young. This leads led these people to decide unwisely about which brand of chocolate to purchase. Therefore, TV commercials focused on children less than five years old are supposed to be prohibited from TV.
Advertisements on TV are useful for people because they provide information about products or services, and help people to purchase certain products. However, I think that companies selling products to children under the age of five needs to stop advertising their products on television. First children cannot make wise decision considering their unstable emotions. Secondly, TV commercials at the early age of people influence the irrational decision about the product during for the rest of their lifetime. |