▶? Your Answer : Some people think that schools do not have to give more salaries to professor for better quality of education. However, in my opinion, giving more salaries to professor is a must. There are two reasons why for the following two subsequent reasons.
First, students can get a variety of major knowledge through high-quality lecture. If professor have more salarise, they has more salaries, he or she (professor는 단수 주어 입니다) will concentrate on their class-quality and communication with students. And they must try diverse research or experiment that will make the lecture more in abundance. For example, when I was in college, the philology professor who had been given high salaries is famous for high-quaility lecture was given high salaries is famous for high quality lecture. Increased salaries gave her chance to research and study abroad. As a result, her interesting updated research made students understand more easily and made them interest in psycology. Likewise, professor will be developed by increased salaries and that result in positive effect to students.
Second, professor will be become (동사가 잘못 서술되었습니다) diligent by high salaries. Some professor do not concentrate on their lecture, do not prepare the lecture diligently, and do not communicate with students. This behaviors eventually will account (will뒤에는 동사 원형을 서술하시길 바랍니다) for student's losing interest. To prevent this, school should give more salaries to professor. To give my anecdote, I took a marketing class last semester. The class professor was not a formal professor, so she was given less salaries than other professor. So, the lectures were (lectures는 복수 주어 입니다) boring and students could not concentrate on her lecture despite of their endeavor. I thought the school should have given more money to her given that student's major knowledge and career . To sum up, the degree of salary decide a student's knowledge and professor's enthusiasm. In this regard, I firmly hold that the school have to give more salaries to professor for the reasons that I mentioned above.
점수: 21 일단 전체적으로 철자적 오류들이 많습니다. 이러한 철자적 오류들이 생기는 가장 큰 이유는 에세이를 서술하고 난 후에 proofreading을 하지 않아서 생기는 거 같습니다. 따라서 에세이를 서술하고 난 후에 proofreading을 하시길 바랍니다. 또한 어색한 표현들이 많은데 이러한 표현들은 에세이 플로우를 방해하기 때문에 주의하면서 에세이를 서술하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셧습니다. |