■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Some people say the internet provides people with a lot of valuable information.
Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? | |
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In these days it seems to be obvious that people rely on the internet more than the other things as the internet gives a lot of information to people. However, possibility to obtain a lot of information on the internet is not always helpful. People should see the other-side of the internet that can cause several problems while showing much information to us. It makes people hard to find proper information and give chance to access bad information that can be used by bad intention.
First of all, as much information people can access on the internet, it is more difficult to find useful and correct information. For example, according to the number of people who take care about their health is being increased, many people usually search the information about the health and use it. However, most of the information does not come from the experts so that most of the tips about the injury or sickness are not the right information. Besides, if people used wrong methods to cure their illness it can cause more serious problems. In other words, while many people upload any information, getting proper one is going to be more difficult.
In addition, it cannot be sure that all the information founded on the internet is useful to society. There are many websites in which people share their experience and material which contains inappropriate information such as about the crimes.
In specific, people can find the way how to break the window without the noisy and use this method to do crimes. It seems to be clear that as there is no limitation to access bad information on the internet, people easily can gain them and use them which can damage to our society.
To conclude, even though the internet become a useful tool to people, accessing a lot of information can cause serious problem as it demands a lot of time to pick up the right information and give chancy to people with bad information more easily that the other media.
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