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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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▶ Topic :The ability to cooperate with others is more important today than in the past. | |
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▶ Your Answer : Those who believe dominant individualism in today's society might say it is in the past that the ability to cooperate with others was more crucial than today, However, I believe that the ability to cooperate with other people is of great necessary compared to the past. There are two major reasons: complex and specialized nature of contemporary society.
To begin with, as society develops it becomes complicated. Problems accrue from society are getting more and more complex. As a result, without having cooperative relationship between people, it becomes hard to resolve such complex problems. As society is getting more complicated, the nature of its problem has been changed. It was simple problem that only single individual was involved in the past, but it is now become becoming so complicated that many people are actually involved in the same problem. Some might say that the advances in technology may resolve the problem instead of cooperating between others. However, what matters is that speed of social change --becoming more complex-- exceeds the speed of technological advances. For example, in the field of biology the clarification of DNA structure was not based on the advances of scientific technologies but based on the cooperation between a number of scientists.
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In addition, as society becomes more specialized, cooperation becomes more crucial than ever. Today, every part of social problem has multi-aspects which should be examined by many professionals. In that sense cooperating between professionals with a variety of backgorund will be required to solve the problem. For example, when the Yellow Wind, a wind containing subtle sand particles in it, happens in Korea, electronic engineers, environmental engineers, governors and diplomats gathered to resolve problem from their own perspective. As this example shows, it is only through cooperation between professionals that can mollify modern problems which are complicated so much. too complicated.
All in all, I agree that cooperation with others is necessary to solve modern society's problem which are complex and specified. | |
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